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From the Shadows 'trapped' by ~neo-gbuddha:iconneo-gbuddha:



From the shadows, I play on whispered tears
in melodic twilight blooming in the open street and I
dance twinkling gems upon your lips in
some spiral rendition of your
Past Life Regression

My delectable tongue and dolorous lungs play
out smoke signals in the garden stage of
Good and Eden, and yet you dare to mock me
a harbinger?

I played you a silver opera on the bare
backs of whales singing in the sea
delirious in the dizzying pursuit
of velveteen madness and you
still dared call me unfaithful to my
cause

yet I can’t seem to meet your hazel
blue gaze because of the things it might
revel to me, so I walk with my eyes closed
waiting patiently until the
brown-edged cliff throws me into
the sky

then, I will see dreams turn mud
and the stars become nothing but
twinkles of past lies
because I know everything is doomed
to fall

and I see my reflection cast in the
silver steel of the moon
and realize some things don’t fall
because they’ve already hit bottom
and there’s no where to go

<Am I trapped?>
©2005-2010 ~neo-gbuddha
:iconneo-gbuddha:

Author's Comments

yea

i have too many things weighing me down

including my life



From the Shadows <trapped>

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:iconkame:
I really liked the whole thing, but this part got me the most:

"
I played you a silver opera on the bare
backs of whales singing in the sea
delirious in the dizzying pursuit
of velveteen madness and you
still dared call me unfaithful to my
cause"
:iconedgeofwrath:
Brilliant dude... I really REALLY like this one. I know exactly how you feel right now. I've got so much shit going on it feels like I'm crushed under it all. My favorite stanza has got to be,

yet I can’t seem to meet your hazel
blue gaze because of the things it might
revel to me, so I walk with my eyes closed
waiting patiently until the
brown-edged cliff throws me into
the sky

I don't know who you're talking about specifically, but none the less, I love the concept. This is goin on my favs dude.

--
The Edge... there is no honest way to explain it because the only people who really know where it is are the ones who have gone over. - Hunter S. Thompson

"I'm happy just to be." - DJ Encore
:iconexquisitemess:
that is breathtaking.
seriously, david, this is good stuff.
:iconburntoast11:
Nice job, I really like the part:

yet I can’t seem to meet your hazel
blue gaze because of the things it might
revel to me, so I walk with my eyes closed
waiting patiently until the
brown-edged cliff throws me into
the sky

especially the walking with the eyes closed part. i didn't think the end was quite as strong as your beginning but regardless, this is really great.
:iconfunkfaerie:
Very nice piece... emotional, but not rabidly so. I love the way the words flow so well together, creating a nice rhythm.
:iconcynicallyhopeful:
Oh lord. Not only do your thoughts haunt mine... Im prepared to hate you. Finally a rival of eloquence.

--
Believe in reality, but ne’er in truth
for truth remains the fool’s illusion.

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